Talk:Breaking Dawn/@comment-66.213.24.10-20120818173924/@comment-5505664-20120819010412

Review time: First off, oh my God, these characters are Mary Sues. They're beautiful, uber powerful, have many talents/vampire powers and troubled backstories.

Second, the first half was very vague, you go into very little detail. Stuff just...happens with no build up. What, super vamp manages to beat up the entire wolfpack? Yeah, no. And no, Leah would not "lust" after a vampire. She hates them and is a sane character. And like I said, the main character was very Sueish. Many powers, incredibly strong, scares the Volturi, somehow has a billion dollar Egyptian necklace and has many admirers. Not to mention the whole "murdering thousands of people" thing. I can't like a mass murdering character like that.

Second half, oh boy, gratuitious rape, the staple of any Sue fic. Again, this character is also very Sueish. Beautiful, high IQ, talented artist/poet, can play violin and piano, troubled past, doesn't know they're beautiful. These are bad characters and they seriously need work.