User blog:Miika Kiryu/my friends story

this is a piece of one of my friends writings and shes looking for some feed back plz help if u want.

lycanlover-- email @ [mailto:storyfeed@yahoo.com storyfeed@yahoo.com]
this isn't really a fan fiction but it is related to the theme in some ways and i am just looking for some feed back plz.

'''..... I turned to daisuke and shoved him aganist the wall using enough force to only shake him up. the wall shook with the impact, asmall crack appearring behind his head. i let go and backed up slowly as he brushed the dust off his clothes. he looked at me playfully smiling." imperssive. been working out?"'''

he moved to touch me but i moed away."oh come on ali. you know i was playing."

'''"no i didn't!" i turned on him fangs beared and all. " you were going to bite her!" i growled through my teeth it was very hard to get me angry especially if you were daisuke. &gt;&gt;&gt;&gt;'''