User blog comment:LovelyChrys/My Fanfic: "Newborn Vampires" Chapters 1,2, and 3/@comment-5505664-20120611061702

Your self insert doesn't seem too bothered with the fact that she killed a man, or that his nosy is still there. Utterly unrealistic characters, poor dialogue and the writing is all over the place...wow, this is actually my first negative fanfic review. Congrats on that.