User blog comment:Nattielouiseray/A Book/@comment-9767210-20130615030638

They're great ideas, however they lack originality. Both have been done so much by so many people, it would be nice if you could tell us how it would differ from those other published novels. & also, I would suggest maybe not writing every word with a capital, it's not necessary and it makes it hard to read. But other than that, great ideas, you just have to be crafty with them.