User blog comment:V1D4L/Fan Fiction/@comment-178.200.149.138-20130728093115

Hi V1D4L,

first I wan't to complement on your writing itself. It's really fascinating but as you mentioned that many have posted mixed feelings about you changing a character I also have my Problems with that. And I don't mind if the characters might be a little of as that isn't really a problem...even real life humans are sometimes a little "off" ;)

But changing the lore on the other hand is a big problem as it does move the story away from a fanfic towards an entirely diffenrent world with characters from another one...

At Renesmee's birth they couldn't even penetrate the amniotic sack with a scalpell or needle or even ultrasound. Also it was mentioned that she could crush little rocks even when she appeared to be around 5 years old...

It just doesn't make sense that a human could hurt her at all with any of the methods you described. That's why I can't go on reading past chapter 8 without feeling I'm not reading a twilight-story but something else...nothing bad at all but just not the Twilight Saga

I would plead you to keep writing because it looks and feels really promising but if you want to get many readers by writing a story based on a preset lore with lots and lots of fans around the world you should really pay attention and respect to the established lore and follow it to the letter...

Maybe others don't bother but others do... and I'm pretty sure Renesmee could squish that dude like a bug in a split-second